Thứ Sáu, 30 tháng 10, 2009

Descriptive Essays

Rainbow Heaven

Noone has an easy life, I sometimes feel very stressed because of the burdens of life. It's getting dark outside; I'm sitting here, alone in my room. Everything around me is so silent and quiet tonight. My eyes are looking straight to the screen of computer. I'm thinking about the dead-line of writing subject. My mind is empty and I have no idea to write. I'm going to get a bad mark, I'm really hopeless. Thus, I listen to music to feel relaxed. "Tell me the way to rainbow heaven where life is full of happiness", a beautiful melody of my favourite Chinese song is being played. Yes, I just want to find a place like that. I close my eyes and follow the happy melody; I'm on the way to rainbow heaven.
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It's far into the night, there is a sound as someone is knocking on the door. I shut down my computer and go to the door in silence. I open the door quietly, a strange white light suddenly apears in front of my eyes and makes me blind. Then I swoon. I don't know what happened to me, but I'm alive now. I wake up and look around with surprised eyes. I talk to myself :" Oh, What a wonderful place! I'm in rainbow heaven, it's real". I see a huge rainbow above my head. In the sky, the sun and the moon are shining at the same time. They change the colour of light from red to yellow, from yellow to blue, from blue to pink and various colours like a disco light. The Milky-way is not far from here, I can see a lot of colourful stars twinkling clearly. This is the most beautiful sky I have ever seen. My eyes are full of colours and my nose is being attracted by an impetuous fragrance. It's so sweet and pure. I'm standing in a field of flowers. There are so many kinds of flower here such as red rose, yeallow sun-flower, purple violet...They are waving in the cool wind. The weather is so comfortable, I can feel the fresh air here. Actually, this place makes my worries go away. I wish to live here forver. But something's wrong, my stomach is boiling. I run into the fore forest to find something to eat. After runing awhile, I find out a tree like apple tree. I'm not sure because the fruits also have a lot of colours. I pick one fruit to eat. Luckily, it's delicious and I have a nice meal. Normally, I'm thirsty because I ate too much. I go to the lake next to the forest. The water is very pure here and that is a problem. When I see my shadow in the lake, I feel awesome. I look like a gecko. I have green skin, red hair, blue eyes...Oh my god! While I feel so confused, I hear that sound again. My mom is knocking on the door because I get up too late. A new day is waiting for me.
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Although rainbow heaven is just in my dream, it really makes me happy when I think about it. And it teachs me a lesson. I think rainbow heaven is suitable for someone like angel. I'm a human, so I must face with challenges in my life. When I get over them, I will feel happy. Now, I come back to my writing subject to create my own rainbow heaven.

3 nhận xét:

  1. i'm really suprired. it's very interesting.i smiled a lot when i read it.you just have some small mistake.

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  2. Khanh Duy CRITERIA GRADES COMMENTS
    Paragraph level Unity, Coherence A
    Development A+
    Supporting ideas A
    Grammar/ Sentence level A-
    Vocabulary A
    Essay level Introductory paragraph ( the Hook, background and thesis statement) A
    Development and supporting ideas A
    Connections among the paragraphs A
    Concluding paragraph A-
    Final Score 8.5 Very interesting bc of your good imagination

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